When I was a child and all the way through my teenage years, my parents would take me on a 2 week trip up north, during the summer. They both worked for GM. As anyone who is familiar with those who work for one of the auto companies can tell you, every summer, the production plants shutdown for a little over a week to retool for the new model year. So my parents took almost all of their time off and saved it for this time. Every year we would go to a town called Elk Rapids. It was a quaint little town, or at least it used to be, and it was always a very peaceful time for me. We would go to the beach almost everyday, so long as it wasn’t raining. My Mom preferred to be mostly to ourselves and so we would set up at the farthest end of the beach. This is where my story begins.
This is not the exact spot but it’s quite close |
There were never many people in this area because, although it was beautiful, the water was very rocky on this end of the beach. When I was about 7 or 8, my parents first let me go off far into the water on my own. We had recently found these mesh shoes that had hard rubber soles, so you could walk on the rocks without it being too painful. So on this particular trip, I went further out into the water than I ever had before. It was incredible. I was actually far enough out to swim for once instead of wade.
Eventually, when it seemed that I was half a mile from the shore, I came upon this huge rock that I had never encountered before. It was massive. So big in fact, that even though I was deep enough to be able to swim comfortably, I could climb the rock and nearly be out of the water entirely. It was a mottled orange, red, black and brown boulder. It was quite out of place, being so much larger than any of the other rocks anywhere around it. If you had told me at the time that it had been placed there, I probably would’ve believed you. Nobody else came out to this area. It was either too rocky for them or they just couldn’t be bothered. Seeing that it wasn’t claimed by anyone else, I therefore decided that the boulder was mine. I couldn’t move it and claim it officially, but I was pretty certain that no one else could either. My reign went unchallenged. I was king of the rock.
Over the years, I met other kids at the beach. We would all play together and hang out, but I never brought anyone else to the rock. It was my thing. The place where I would go if the other kids weren’t around. The rock seemed to prefer it that way too. I almost never saw anyone out at it. The one time I did, it didn’t end well. Another kid was playing by the rock and tripped. He fell and cut his chin and knees on the rock. Needless to say, he was not allowed out near the rock again after that. I never had any problems like that out there. It was as if the rock was allowing me to be there with it. Sure, I bumped my knees a few times. Other than some scrapes though, I never got hurt. I would spend hours sitting on the rock in the sun, jumping off of it into the water. The most fun days to be out there were when the waves were high.
I don’t know if you’ve ever swam for a long time in wavy water but you get a workout quickly. On those days, there was hardly anyone at the beach. I loved those times. I would spend the whole day fighting the current. I would get so used to it that when I tried to go to sleep that night, I could still feel the waves hitting my body. It was an odd but rather pleasant sensation.
When I got older, we continued to go to the beach, although less often than before. The magic of the boulder and the water had warn off for me. Reality finally set in. What had seemed like half a mile from the shore, was in reality less than 100 yards. The water wasn’t deep enough for me to swim in anymore. The boulder that had seemed so impressive, was now just a big rock. If I looked further to the right of the rock, I could see some of its brethren. Some of which, were even larger. The fairy dust had settled and I could see reality for what it was. This wasn’t necessarily the end of my innocence, but that day, another door to my childhood shut for good.
I haven’t been to this place in years. Writing this makes me want to drive there immediately, though I doubt I’d be doing any swimming right now if I did. As I write, I can still see the beach. How could I not? It’s been etched into my memory. I can still see the break wall, the road, the shady tree up near the parking area. Most of all though, I can see my old orange friend, peaking out at me through the waves. Beckoning me to come join. One day I will go back. And one day I’ll climb that rock once more.
You are a great storyteller! I love that you chose a memory from your childhood, it seems very heartfelt. I enjoyed the humor that you included in the beginning about "The Rock" Johnson. I think this helped promote your authentic voice for this piece. It helped give me a little bit of an understanding of your personality. I also liked how you found a picture that resembles what you saw when you went on this vacation with your family, even if it is not the exact spot. This way, readers can picture what you saw at this time and be in the story with you. In the last paragraph, the addition of "One day I'll climb that rock once more." helped tie it all together. It leaves the reader on a positive note and creates the impression that this is a vacation spot that means a great deal to you and your family. The only thing I would suggest is to space out your paragraphs a bit more so that it is easier to read, but other than that this story is great! Nice job!
ReplyDeleteThank you, I am glad you enjoyed my story. Yeah, I struggled with how to make it more easily readable. Thanks for the tip, I'll try to do that for next time.
DeleteYour memoir was very enjoyable to read. Your tone was very authentic, adding a lot of meaning to what you were saying. Also, I like the beginning how you reference the actor "The Rock". I like the beginning as someone else put about using "The Rock" as a reference to your memoir. I think that if you could have found a way to correlate the "The Rock" with your memoir and the "rock" that you were referring to would have been even more appealing. But regardless, you did very well and reading your memoir really made me think back about my own childhood and the memories captured.
ReplyDeleteI found the beginning of your piece very funny, which definitely attracted me to your writing! I also think that your incorporation of a picture helps me as the reader feel more invested in your story. Your writing really showcases authenticity when it is read, and I applaud you for your post this week. I also believe your topic of a childhood memory was a good choice if you are looking to make a similar connection with your audience, as I believe that most people reading began to reminisce on their own childhood memories as well.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your posted and I think you payed good attention to detail but did not overshare which is the perfect balance. Overall my only suggestion would be to share a little bit about the emotions you felt when you think back to that rock now, so that it is more explicit to the reader and they can connect to your story even more.
Overall, you did a really good job and I am very impressed with your writing!
I like the way you did your story - it was simple, but personal. It felt like you were letting people in to see your innermost thoughts and be included into your memories. At the same time there was a satirical, light-hearted nature to the way that you spoke; it made the entire memoir read much more in a relaxed and enjoyable manner. I think you did a really good job with trying to describe things like feelings and details that you could remember without bogging yourself down in the extreme, nitty-gritty details of things.
ReplyDeleteA good story to read!